Hi could you correct me this letter please?

i'm italian and i'm not good ^^





Dear Jim,


how're you?


thanks for your letter which i received yesterday!


At weekends here in Palermo we could do a lot of things! (here i don't know how write impersonal form "si possono fare")


Some day my friends and I go to the centre to do shopping like you or we go to mondello


beach (the sun comes in mars!) or we play volleyball in some common garden or we go skating on the ice!!


And the saturday evening we often go to eat pizza and after to walk in centre or sometime we


go to the disco or usually we see a film in my house or in my friends' house.


Every weekends we really enjoy ourselves!


Do you do other things the saturday evening?


Write-me soon


kisses Gabriella

Hi could you correct me this letter please?
Gabriella, how about this? I corrected it for you and changed many words but, the meaning is the same. Have fun!








Dear Jim





How are you? Thanks for your letter which I received yesterday!





On weekends here in Palermo we can do many things. On Some days my friends and I like to go to the shopping center just like you do in the States. We often go to Mondello Beach to watch the beautiful sunsets, play volleyball in the garden or go ice skating!!





On Saturday evenings we often go out to eat pizza and go for a walk in the mall afterward. Sometimes, we go dancing and usually watch a film in my house or at my friends' house.





We really enjoy our weekends! Do you do similar things on Saturday evenings?





Write me soon,


kisses,


Gabriella
Reply:Dear Jim,





How are you?





Thanks for your letter which i received yesterday!





At the weekends here in Palermo we could do a lot of things!


Like you, some days my friends and I go to the centre to shop, we also go to mondello beach, play volleyball in a garden or we go ice skating.





On Saturday evenings we often go and have a pizza and sometimes walk in the centre afterwards. We go to the disco or usually we see a film in my house or in my friend's house.


Every weekend we really enjoy ourselves!





Do you do other things on Saturday evenings?





Write-me soon


kisses Gabriella
Reply:The impersonal form of 'si possono fare' can be expressed in a few ways in English.


'you can do a lot of things' (between friends)


'one can do a lot of things' (formal)


or 'alot of things can be done'





Your English is very good but see my corrections below.





Some days (or sometimes) my friends and I......





...or we go ice-skating.





And on Saturday evening......





And afterwards we walk.....





Sometimes we go to the disco.....





...in my friend's house.





Every weekend.....





Do you do other things on Saturday evenings?





Also we don't usually use the expression 'to go to the centre' in English. We mostly say 'to go into town' or 'to go into the city'.
Reply:Dear Jim,


Thanks for your letter I received it yesterday.


How are you?





In Palermo at weekends there are a lot of things for us to do.


Some days my friends and I go to the centre to do shopping, or we go to Mondello


beach (the Sun comes in mars!), we play volleyball or go ice skating.


And the Saturday evening we often go to eat pizza, walk in centre after. Occasionally we go to the disco or to see a film in my friends or my house.


We really enjoy ourselves every weekend.


What do you do on the Saturday evening?


Write soon


kisses Gabriella
Reply:I saw some grammatical errors but I don't think you should have a personal letter edited by somebody else. If this were a professional letter, that would be different. Since this is personal, send it the way you wrote it.





Some of the grammatical errors is what makes it more personal.
Reply:The corrections offered by Jodie, Teddy Bear and others are poor. DO NOT USE THEM.





Your letter is a true example of your good English.





With a little more practise it should become excellent!





Many native English speakers (includes USA) could not compose a letter such as yours - just look at the questions and answers on Y/A!
Reply:Dear Jim,


How're you? Thanks for your letter which I recieved yesterday! Durind the weekends here in Palermo we could do a lot of things.


and:


every weekend, we really enjoy ourselves.
Reply:Dear Jim,


How are you? Thanks for your letter which I received yesterday. Weekends here in Palermo there are many things to do. Somedays my friends and I go to the center to do shopping or we go to Mondello beach . We also play volleyball in some common garden or go ice skating. On saturday evenings we often go to eat pizza and after go walk to the centre or go to the disco. Sometimes we see a movie at my house or a friends house. Every weekend we really have a good time. What other things do you do on Saturday evening. Write me soon.


Kisses,


Gabriella











I am not to sure what the sun comes in mars means. Hope this helps!
Reply:Dear Jim,


How are you? Thanks for your letter which i received yesterday!


At weekends here in Palermo we do a lot of things!


Some days my friends and I go to the shopping centre like you, or we go to mondello beach (the sun comes in may!) or we play volleyball in the garden, also we go ice skating!!


And on a saturday evening we often for a pizza and after that we have a walk in the centre. Sometimes we go to a disco or we watch a film at my house or at my friends' house.


Every weekend we really enjoy ourselves!


Do you do any other things on saturday evenings?


Write back to me soon


kisses Gabriella
Reply:Dear Jim,





How are you?





Thanks for your letter which I received yesterday!





At weekends here in Palermo we could do a lot of things!(Here I don't know how to write impersonal form "si possono fare.")





Some day my friends and I go to the centre to do shopping like you or we go to mondello beach (the sun comes in mars!) or we play volleyball in some common garden we go ice skating!!





On Saturday evening we often go to eat pizza and after to walk in centre or sometimes we go to the disco or usaully we see a movie in my house or in my friend's house.





Every weekend we really enjoy ourselves!





Do you do other things on Saturday evening?





Write-me soon





kisses Gabriella
Reply:Dear Jim,


How are you? Thank you for your letter which i received yesterday. Over the weekends here, in Palermo, theres many things we could do. Some days my friends and I go into the town centre to do shopping like you or we go to mondello


beach (the sun comes in mars!), play volleyball or go iceskating.


Saturday evenings we often go out to eat pizza and then walk into the centre of town. Sometimes we


go to a disco or we watch a film at my house or at my friends' .


Every weekends we really do enjoy ourselves!


Do you do other things on a Saturday evening?


Write to me soon


Kisses


Gabriella x











(Hope this helps)
Reply:you know something funny?


Palermo in brazilian portuguese means someone ''retarded'', ''slow brain''.





Sorry, I really would like to help you but I think my english sucks more than yours.


hehehehe
Reply:"I am getting laid every night but don't worry as I am making sure that they use protection so I wont pass anything on to you. Can I bring Marcos home with me?"
Reply:Dear Jim,





My english sucks so I really should get a translater.





Sincerely,


Gabriella
Reply:Wow, what an exciting life. Yawn- oh well, andare la casa.
Reply:ok